11-23-2010, 01:18 AM
Please leave all feedback and criticisms here, constructive or otherwise... Just so people don't have to actually read it while trying to read the stories 
FLAME ON!
FLAME ON!
11-23-2010, 03:22 AM
I love it, great story! Your description of the fight seen came of fairly smooth, which is saying a lot. Most people, in my opinion, can't write action scenes well.
The only issues I could see offhand were a few minor grammatical errors, and I don't really care about those as I make them all the time myself so can't truely hold them over anyone else's head.
The only issues I could see offhand were a few minor grammatical errors, and I don't really care about those as I make them all the time myself so can't truely hold them over anyone else's head.
11-23-2010, 08:05 PM
Ghunzyr Wrote:I love it, great story! Your description of the fight seen came of fairly smooth, which is saying a lot. Most people, in my opinion, can't write action scenes well.Thank you, that was probably the section of the story that took the longest to fit together in a way that actually flowed.
Ghunzyr Wrote:The only issues I could see offhand were a few minor grammatical errors, and I don't really care about those as I make them all the time myself so can't truely hold them over anyone else's head.Heh, that's why I'm going to try to find an editor at some point if I do keep on writing, it's their job to catch those things!!