• Valkyrie is the daughter of a farmer who has two sisters
  
• Her mother died giving birth to her
  
• Her two sisters are very talented and travel often
  
• Her eldest sister is an archer
  
• Her other sister is a blacksmith
  
• Both of them are always traveling and her father is very proud of them
  
• Valkyrie has no real goals in life and is very naive and innocent she loves her father despite him being a drunk and seeing her as burden
  
• When her eldest sister came back from traveling she seemed to be struck by madness
  
• The father hired a conjurer and the conjurer told the father that she had been over exposed by voidsent from being near the void gate
  
• Valkyrie father urged her to follow him taking her to a secluded area
  
• There Valkyrie father begged a voidsent to take Valkyrie and in return the voidsent would give some of its blood to save his daughter
  
• The voidsent agreed and took Valkyrie back with it to the void
  
• Valkyrie spent many years in the void but does not fully remember any of her past or time spent there only knowing that she was in the void
  
• Valkyrie mind is very twisted from spending so much time in the void and has become corrupt
  
• While she looks innocent for her to be able to remain in Eorzea she has to consume large amounts of Aether and be exposed to the void gate
  
• She seems mentally stable and unaffected by her past events it is only a mask
  
  
  Personality:
  
  

• Valkyrie seems very innocent and sweet the odd time she will say something that will throw everyone off making them think that there may be more to her than meets the eye.
  
• She is very good at controlling the conversation and making others feel at ease. When she does put something on the table by mistake she is good at moving the conversation forward and making others not really look into the past words she had said.
  
• She seems to be always plotting something.
  
• People that once knew her before she was sent into the void would not be able to recognize her at all.
  
• She is always smiling and sometimes her smile seems almost creepy.
  
• She uses her looks to her advantage
  
• She pretends to have a bit of a temper but it is only an act she puts on for others
  

(03-25-2015, 08:02 AM)Warren Castille Wrote: That doesn't sound unreasonable. I'd be wary of some of the more subjective things - "she's good at making people feel at ease" hinges on the roleplay itself - but for my money this exists in the grey side of "sure, why not?" that most folks playing off-beat strive for.

Eorzea could use a few more psychic vampire monster people.

(03-25-2015, 09:25 AM)Nebbs Wrote: Being construcbtive...

I would suggest writing down what other people can see or sense from her. I would allow some sense of her void link and aether dependency to be apparent to those who might be able to sense it.

Also I would consider her flaws and how you play them. Maybe something she is suceptable to or will avoid, like life energy or direct sunlight. It just adds to the flavour.

I hope that helps.

(03-25-2015, 08:02 AM)Warren Castille Wrote: That doesn't sound unreasonable. I'd be wary of some of the more subjective things - "she's good at making people feel at ease" hinges on the roleplay itself - but for my money this exists in the grey side of "sure, why not?" that most folks playing off-beat strive for.

Eorzea could use a few more psychic vampire monster people.

(03-25-2015, 08:31 AM)Alothia Wrote: I really like the way that this reads. It's an interesting spin on the fresh face look that you were going for, and it fits to lore.

I agree with staying away from the subjective judgements, not that they can't be true, but just make sure that you play her that way so that people will actually think that of her.

(03-25-2015, 08:47 AM)T Wrote: All you really have to do is get into the meat of the RP and put some proof behind the subjective grey area stuff, then you can claim it all you want.

I could say that T'caska has never offended anyone and some people may never question it. But if I RP T'caska as a very polite, considerate, and contentious person, then I would probably never be questioned.

Not that T'caska is very polite, just sayin'.

(03-25-2015, 09:25 AM)Nebbs Wrote: Being construcbtive...

I would suggest writing down what other people can see or sense from her. I would allow some sense of her void link and aether dependency to be apparent to those who might be able to sense it.

Also I would consider her flaws and how you play them. Maybe something she is suceptable to or will avoid, like life energy or direct sunlight. It just adds to the flavour.

I hope that helps.

(03-25-2015, 12:29 PM)Xheja Rajhera Wrote:

(03-25-2015, 09:25 AM)Nebbs Wrote: Being construcbtive...

I would suggest writing down what other people can see or sense from her. I would allow some sense of her void link and aether dependency to be apparent to those who might be able to sense it.

Also I would consider her flaws and how you play them. Maybe something she is suceptable to or will avoid, like life energy or direct sunlight. It just adds to the flavour.

I hope that helps.

I agree with Nebbs here. 

Xheja has a pretty similar concept, and I go this route myself. There are a lot of characters out there that are sensitive to others' aether. It's not unreasonable to think that they would be picking up on a case of heavy Void corruption.

Of course the problem with this is that if your character is a beacon of big bad Voidyness, public RP can be hard with how many people will sense that and potentially come after you. That can be especially problematic just starting out when you don't have a real foundation for a character yet and are feeling them out through public RP. So finding a logical explanation to balance believability and convenience is pretty important. 

Really it's just a matter of balancing and rounding out your character with positives/negatives and strengths/weaknesses, especially when messing around with Void associated characters. Because there's a definite line you can easily cross from acceptably quirky to annoyingly overpowered if you're not careful (or sometimes without even meaning to), IMHO.