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Vallerin Hortimont · **08-10-2015, 06:45 AM**

Hi all,

New to the website and the RP scene in FFXIV, so this is my first character entry.

I spent some time working on the wiki page for my character Vallerin Hortimont, and figured I'd drop it here and open up the flood gates for some constructive criticism.

https://wiki.ffxiv-roleplayers.com/pages..._Hortimont

I have a thick skin, so go ahead and rip it apart if you wish. Looking for anything that might seem unbelievable or contradict established lore conventions, as well as any general writing suggestions.

Thanks for taking the time to look. I will be adding more character relationships tomorrow, but right now I am tired! Looking forward to reading any feedback.

É´á´˜á´„ · **08-10-2015, 10:32 AM**

I'm not the most well-versed when it comes to Ishgardian skullduggery, but this seems like a solid work up to me. His personality seems to suit his history, and vice versa.

If a small nitpick would help, I think the contents frame follows a different order from the actual article. Not even sure a fix is necessary, really.

**Unnamed Mercenary** · **08-10-2015, 10:58 AM**

Looks pretty good to me. From what I know about Ishgard (MSQ complete, side stuff....not so much), the history checks out and I'd expect similar things to happen.

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