Heya! So Xenedra suggested I start up a thread asking for character critiques in this board. So here's what I have thus far. I appreciate any critiques I get! Thank you very much!
I should note that I plan on working on that "100 Questions" list as well to further flesh this out. But this is a rough idea.
I should note that I plan on working on that "100 Questions" list as well to further flesh this out. But this is a rough idea.
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Character Bio (WIP)
Name: Virgil Manentyv
Age: 17
Gender: Male/Cisgender
Orientation: Homosexual
Race: Miqo'te
Clan: Keeper of the Moon (Half-Keeper of the Moon, Half-Seeker of the Sun IC)
Starting Job: Arcanist or Barbarian (He always begins as an Arcanist IC, but is required to begin in Limsa Lominsa for his story to work effectively)
History:
Virgil was born to a Seeker of the Sun father named G'kahla Nunh and a Keeper of the Moon mother named Asha Jawantal. Both desired to stick with their respective naming traditions. The mother wished for the child to be named in the traditional Keeper of the Moon way by taking on his mother's name. Feeling that his traditions needed to be kept, the father instead proposed to name the child in the traditional Seeker of the Sun way by taking on his father's name.
Unable to come to any form of compromise on their own due to their conflicting traditions, they asked mutual friends of the couple, a male Hyur playwright named Eadgar Fletcher and a female Roegadyn fisherwoman named Bhariwyb Greinfyswyn, for a suitable name. They chose to name him Virgil after a famed poet in the Fourth Astral Era, with the surname Maenentyv, a name which means "Moon Thief" in the ancient Roegadyn tongue, a subtle reference to the boy's father and how he stole the heart of a Keeper woman.
A few weeks after this joyous day, the child's mother left Limsa Lominsa with only a few words, "I love you" and "Take care of our son.". A few days later, on a starlit night, a squad of three Keepers of the Moon approached the child's father, questioning his whereabouts and revealing that he was a criminal under investigation within the borders of Gridania for theft of flowers from the twelveswood and of an antique music box, a heinous criminal act in Gridania and one punished severely by Gridanian law. Afraid for her child, the father lied, stating she had never heard of such a woman, when they left. The father never revealed to the child about his Keeper heritage.
The child had been born with the physical appearance of a Seeker of the Sun, but had many of the traits of a Keeper of the Moon. He refused to play with the other children, who always insisted they play outside in the bright, harsh sunlight, and instead devoted his time to reading both for study and for recreation. The child knew he was different from the others, but was not told about his mother, so he had no idea how different he truly was, even amongst other Miqo'te in the city.
As the child grew up, his studies had paid off and, after returning from a research expedition out in the deep oceans where he found a weird crystal fragment, he was officially granted the title of Arcanist and given permission to take up the fight for Limsa Lominsa properly. Having never truly fought before, he used his amassed knowledge and intellect to defeat foes and support his allies to the best of his ability.
--FUTURE ARCS--
The following are arcs that will happen later on in the plot of my character once he reaches certain in-game milestones. I can and likely will include many more of these later as I meet new people and develop bonds with them.
A Mother's Masquerade, A True Threat Weighed (Arcanist Lv20)
Upon attaining rank within The Maelstrom, Virgil returns home to his father after having traveled out for a long time and a squad of Keeper of the Moon Miqo'te are asking his father questions. Confused, he asks them what is going on. Through dialogue, he learns the truth: his mother is (or was, her whereabouts are truly unknown) a Keeper of the Moon. He then travels to Gridania in order to accomplish two goals: To offer forgiveness for what his mother had done in any way he could, and to study the ways of nature through the path of the Conjurer.
Life and Lore Intertwined, The Scholar Divined (Arcanist 30, Conjurer 15)
After fighting hard for a very long time, Virgil uses his wisdom and experience from his studies as an Arcanist and from his research as a Conjurer to unlock the secrets to follow the path of the Scholar, combining White Magic and Arcanist Skills to overwhelm enemies and act as a pillar of strength for surrounding allies.
A Mother Found, Surprises Abound (Scholar 30)
Virgil eventually finds his mother in <Unknown> and confronts him about his criminal actions, taking whatever actions necessary to force his mother to clear his name in Gridania and amongst the Keeper clans.
Name: Virgil Manentyv
Age: 17
Gender: Male/Cisgender
Orientation: Homosexual
Race: Miqo'te
Clan: Keeper of the Moon (Half-Keeper of the Moon, Half-Seeker of the Sun IC)
Starting Job: Arcanist or Barbarian (He always begins as an Arcanist IC, but is required to begin in Limsa Lominsa for his story to work effectively)
History:
Virgil was born to a Seeker of the Sun father named G'kahla Nunh and a Keeper of the Moon mother named Asha Jawantal. Both desired to stick with their respective naming traditions. The mother wished for the child to be named in the traditional Keeper of the Moon way by taking on his mother's name. Feeling that his traditions needed to be kept, the father instead proposed to name the child in the traditional Seeker of the Sun way by taking on his father's name.
Unable to come to any form of compromise on their own due to their conflicting traditions, they asked mutual friends of the couple, a male Hyur playwright named Eadgar Fletcher and a female Roegadyn fisherwoman named Bhariwyb Greinfyswyn, for a suitable name. They chose to name him Virgil after a famed poet in the Fourth Astral Era, with the surname Maenentyv, a name which means "Moon Thief" in the ancient Roegadyn tongue, a subtle reference to the boy's father and how he stole the heart of a Keeper woman.
A few weeks after this joyous day, the child's mother left Limsa Lominsa with only a few words, "I love you" and "Take care of our son.". A few days later, on a starlit night, a squad of three Keepers of the Moon approached the child's father, questioning his whereabouts and revealing that he was a criminal under investigation within the borders of Gridania for theft of flowers from the twelveswood and of an antique music box, a heinous criminal act in Gridania and one punished severely by Gridanian law. Afraid for her child, the father lied, stating she had never heard of such a woman, when they left. The father never revealed to the child about his Keeper heritage.
The child had been born with the physical appearance of a Seeker of the Sun, but had many of the traits of a Keeper of the Moon. He refused to play with the other children, who always insisted they play outside in the bright, harsh sunlight, and instead devoted his time to reading both for study and for recreation. The child knew he was different from the others, but was not told about his mother, so he had no idea how different he truly was, even amongst other Miqo'te in the city.
As the child grew up, his studies had paid off and, after returning from a research expedition out in the deep oceans where he found a weird crystal fragment, he was officially granted the title of Arcanist and given permission to take up the fight for Limsa Lominsa properly. Having never truly fought before, he used his amassed knowledge and intellect to defeat foes and support his allies to the best of his ability.
--FUTURE ARCS--
The following are arcs that will happen later on in the plot of my character once he reaches certain in-game milestones. I can and likely will include many more of these later as I meet new people and develop bonds with them.
A Mother's Masquerade, A True Threat Weighed (Arcanist Lv20)
Upon attaining rank within The Maelstrom, Virgil returns home to his father after having traveled out for a long time and a squad of Keeper of the Moon Miqo'te are asking his father questions. Confused, he asks them what is going on. Through dialogue, he learns the truth: his mother is (or was, her whereabouts are truly unknown) a Keeper of the Moon. He then travels to Gridania in order to accomplish two goals: To offer forgiveness for what his mother had done in any way he could, and to study the ways of nature through the path of the Conjurer.
Life and Lore Intertwined, The Scholar Divined (Arcanist 30, Conjurer 15)
After fighting hard for a very long time, Virgil uses his wisdom and experience from his studies as an Arcanist and from his research as a Conjurer to unlock the secrets to follow the path of the Scholar, combining White Magic and Arcanist Skills to overwhelm enemies and act as a pillar of strength for surrounding allies.
A Mother Found, Surprises Abound (Scholar 30)
Virgil eventually finds his mother in <Unknown> and confronts him about his criminal actions, taking whatever actions necessary to force his mother to clear his name in Gridania and amongst the Keeper clans.
Hope gives the earth blessings
Courage lights the flames
Kindness makes water the source of life
Pursuit lets wisdom ride the wind
Burning Passion's Passionate Profile of Burning~!
Courage lights the flames
Kindness makes water the source of life
Pursuit lets wisdom ride the wind
Burning Passion's Passionate Profile of Burning~!
 
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