(04-23-2015, 02:20 PM)Verad Wrote: I actually disagree with Aya that it's a stream-of-consciousness post, because it feels too structured for that. Stream of consciousness, to me anyway, represents a more scattered form of thinking, the mind moving back and forth between several tracks, represented by a falling apart of sentence and paragraph structure. The post avoids that - Gogonji's thought process is easy to track and comes to a simple conclusion - and it's better for it. It would be a much harder thing to read if it were written like some of the classics of that mode of writing, and I don't think your purpose here is to make Gogonji impenetrable to the reader.I agree entirely with what Verad said. I refer to it as stream-of-consciousness because it feels that the narration is literally Gogonji's stream of thought. I didn't mean to suggest that it was obfuscating, hard to follow, or disorganized. There is a coherent and easily understandable flow to the whole thing
So the writing style and purpose is fine. My one comment comes from this:
[This probably comes down to one of us actually being man of literature and the other being a simple RPer ^_^]
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