(03-05-2013, 01:19 AM)Aysun Wrote: I guess I'll just point out the simplest of oddities I noticed.
He's a Miqo'te, right? Assuming his line is pure (which I'd expect if he is noble or something), his ancestors would be from the migratory group that came to Eorzea during Fifth Umbral Era, presumably long after the Allagans reign in the Third Astral Era.
He's from a Hyurian bloodline. He ended up with that because his father found love in a Miqo'te. Didn't get the best feedback from his parents from doing that.
Also, I haven't put Ryanti's history down on paper, but that's definitely going to be the vocal point, not his family. I didn't think I got that across before.
Anyway, feedback's been noted, though I warn it'll take longer to fix. If not because of creative processes, because things got frozen off my hands, and it's covered in blisters so it makes it moderately painful to type. Also, because college. Which is eating up all of my time.
Brainstorming is welcome too if you wish. It would help me with time management.
Also, I really want to do something Allagan. Because I have always been fascinated with the supremely advanced vanished ancient empire archetype.
