This happened to me recently in combat. In order to prevent someone from getting past, Orrin was trying to keep them pushed back. He decides to give him a good baseball swing with the blunt end of his very top heavy spear to do the job.
problem is...I don't want to describe it as a baseball swing. Yes saying it like that would make it very clear to a reader the intention and image of the movement, but I feel it breaks immersion because the narration no longer gels with the world. Since there is no Baseball as far as we know, how would you go about describing it? I ended up saying it was a very powerful, full bodied, horizontal swing.
If anyone else ran into similar issues in expression that they want to share, feel free!
problem is...I don't want to describe it as a baseball swing. Yes saying it like that would make it very clear to a reader the intention and image of the movement, but I feel it breaks immersion because the narration no longer gels with the world. Since there is no Baseball as far as we know, how would you go about describing it? I ended up saying it was a very powerful, full bodied, horizontal swing.
If anyone else ran into similar issues in expression that they want to share, feel free!
