(11-18-2015, 02:42 AM)Lavi Levlavi Wrote:(11-18-2015, 01:31 AM)Faye Wrote: It comes across as very... uhh... how to say this... fetishized? If that's what you're going for that's fine, but if not, it's probably gonna drive some people away and maybe attract the wrong folks.I would say its lightly fetishized. Â I can see how you'd say that, and its probably not untrue. Â It's pretty representative of the actual me, so you could say I'm living a slightly fetishy life depending on how you look at things.
Do you think adding more about some of my other exploits and hobbies would be a good idea to offset that somewhat.
I think that would help! The love for food and the character's weight/size are a good starting point and make the character stand out, but I think some more unrelated details would help the character seem more three-dimensional and fleshed out!
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