(05-20-2013, 12:50 AM)Eva Wrote: Â or Ishgard.........
On a separate note, in addition to what Aysun said, there was one thing that kind of bothered me, and that was the character's age. The idea of him making tough life decisions and battling for his title at age 11 seems kind of weird. Same with putting heads on pikes at age 15. He's your character, so do whatever you want, but the math just doesnt seem to work. Just my opinion.
Also, I'll give you the advice I've given others (and myself about 600 times): keep it simple. Back stories are great and I like to write as well, so I know how easy it is to get caught up in your character. Keep in mind though that your character's journey should be the game, not take place before the game. I'm not saying "Your character should be a boring nobody until you start RPing" but I've found that too much fluff can take away from the experience at hand. Your character has a lot going on. A lot of it I really like, but some of it I think you can kind of cut out. The buzz phrases I like to remind myself of when I make my characters, are "Cut the fat out" and "Streamlined Story".Â
Of course, this is just me. I personally don't like to get myself muddled up in details before I even get the chance to explore the rest of my story in-game. If you're 100% set on every thing your character has done, then more power to you. Just an observation. Hopefully it was helpful and not too nit-picky.
