I have to echo Silmanos and Valence's posts (and the main reason I inquired about your character's age is the issue Silmanos brought up about how unlikely it would be for your character to master so many trades in such a short amount of time). Another problem (and it's not necessarily your fault, as you didn't create it) is the template. It's very long and difficult to read yet makes for short and choppy descriptions, some of the fields end up feeling repetitive, and a lot of it seems like relatively useless details - for example, the ages of his/her family members. Those details are good to know and maybe have written down somewhere to remember them, but your public biography should be a snapshot of your character for other players to learn more about him/her and decide if they want to RP with you. Details like the ages of his/her family members don't really help with that, and when we're already bombarded with so much information, they just become another trivia fact to wade through to find some substance. I'd recommend condensing the biography, or remaking it with a different template entirely. We don't need to know every detail of your character's life, we just need a feel for who they are as a person, what they do, and how they are likely to interact with others.
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