Hiiii! Welcome to the RPC!
I am assuming by Gardenia you were referring to Gridiana? The Eorzean city-state located in the Black Shroud? Or were you creating your own village setting named Gardenia (which should be fine, but some more background on the intended context would be helpful
)?
The basic idea sounds great, but I did have a few questions.
I'm not aware of the Garleans hiring bandits to scout for them (though I am far from an expert!). They do use auxiliaries, but those would be, say, Ala Mhigan scouts and they would be unlikely to go around burning villages as part of a scouting mission. That part really doesn't quite hold together for me: was this intended to be very recently? Given the... circumstances (since we are still covered under spoiler rules) it would not be hard to imagine a Garlean punitive raid being the cause.
I'm also curious about the character's psychology, he came from far away and then was settled by two loving adoptive parents who have become the most important things in his like, is he not interested in their culture? Maybe its just me but the focus on the culture of his homeland (such as burying his adoptive parents in a tradition that would be alien to them) seems a little off. Sort of a rejection of the adoption. Not that such a thing would be implausible, it just didn't seem intended. If you originally meant Gridania is where he settled, that also means that the Elementals have accepted him as a citizen of the Shroud through the Hearers. That's something, and its something that would probably mean quite a bit to him. Its part of what makes Gridania a potentially interesting adoptive home for him.
Lastly, I'm just gong to mention my very generic "why-are-everyone's-parents-dead" bit. I understand that it makes characters more free to pursue whatever ends they desire without responsibility, and also creates the potential for a tragic-past, but I think you should give a touch of thought, at least, to the possibility that his adoptive parents could still be alive and an active thought in the back of his mind as he goes about discovering himself, exploring Eorzea, and with the new expansion, returning home. And what that might add to or detract from the story
I am assuming by Gardenia you were referring to Gridiana? The Eorzean city-state located in the Black Shroud? Or were you creating your own village setting named Gardenia (which should be fine, but some more background on the intended context would be helpful
)?The basic idea sounds great, but I did have a few questions.
I'm not aware of the Garleans hiring bandits to scout for them (though I am far from an expert!). They do use auxiliaries, but those would be, say, Ala Mhigan scouts and they would be unlikely to go around burning villages as part of a scouting mission. That part really doesn't quite hold together for me: was this intended to be very recently? Given the... circumstances (since we are still covered under spoiler rules) it would not be hard to imagine a Garlean punitive raid being the cause.
I'm also curious about the character's psychology, he came from far away and then was settled by two loving adoptive parents who have become the most important things in his like, is he not interested in their culture? Maybe its just me but the focus on the culture of his homeland (such as burying his adoptive parents in a tradition that would be alien to them) seems a little off. Sort of a rejection of the adoption. Not that such a thing would be implausible, it just didn't seem intended. If you originally meant Gridania is where he settled, that also means that the Elementals have accepted him as a citizen of the Shroud through the Hearers. That's something, and its something that would probably mean quite a bit to him. Its part of what makes Gridania a potentially interesting adoptive home for him.
Lastly, I'm just gong to mention my very generic "why-are-everyone's-parents-dead" bit. I understand that it makes characters more free to pursue whatever ends they desire without responsibility, and also creates the potential for a tragic-past, but I think you should give a touch of thought, at least, to the possibility that his adoptive parents could still be alive and an active thought in the back of his mind as he goes about discovering himself, exploring Eorzea, and with the new expansion, returning home. And what that might add to or detract from the story
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