(08-02-2017, 03:57 PM)Esmena Wrote: She frowns as though saying, 'Are you serious?'
you can write something like
She frowns and her brows pinch together, lifting somewhat in the center. With a small shake of her head and a small puff of a sigh through her nose, her lips purse into a thin, thin line.Â
Personally I would go middle ground - show don't tell, but (assuming we're talking in-game, dialogue-heavy RP here) abbreviate actions to keep your reader's attention.
So I'd go with any 1 of the following - short sentences using adverbs and adjectives to help the reader along with interpreting, instead of "thought-emotes". (Because ad-words read more naturally, and help people to visualise, rather than making them feel like their character has to be a mind-reader.)
• She squints with skepticism.
• She frowns, doubtful.
• Her tail twitches with frustration.
Followed up by the character taking another, more concrete action to display their opinion, as Qestir are wont to do:
• She squints with skepticism, then simply turns to walk away.
• She frowns, doubtful. She casts her gaze to the suspect item and picks it up, turning it over - and pointing straight to the counterfeit maker's stamp.
• Her tail twitches with frustration. Making brazen eye contact, she rips up the missive, placing the torn pieces back on the table between them.
Ultimately the difference between my suggestions and Es'mena's are aesthetic, but hopefully one or other of them makes sense to you. Either way, Qestir are the ultimate in "show-don't-tell" types of characters, so I think that's a good mantra to bear in mind!
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