To be honest, I haven't and won't read this without paragraph breaks. 
They are necessary for a longer backstory like this. That said, I can't really comment on the lore compliance. But I will say, write the backstory you want to write with the details you want to include. Your character's backstory is for your own enjoyment as much as anyone else's, and it's good to have some details down in the writing so you don't forget or muddle them. If you want others to read and know your character's backstory, however, short and simple is the best way to go. No reason you can't have an abridged version for your wiki or bio, as well as a full version to post elsewhere as a story for anyone who's interested! 
They are necessary for a longer backstory like this. That said, I can't really comment on the lore compliance. But I will say, write the backstory you want to write with the details you want to include. Your character's backstory is for your own enjoyment as much as anyone else's, and it's good to have some details down in the writing so you don't forget or muddle them. If you want others to read and know your character's backstory, however, short and simple is the best way to go. No reason you can't have an abridged version for your wiki or bio, as well as a full version to post elsewhere as a story for anyone who's interested!
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