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Looking for backstory feedback - Worgendonor - 03-30-2015
Hello, all! As you've probably surmised from the thread title, I'm looking for some input on my character's backstory. While my primary concern is making sure I didn't botch anything up involving lore, I'm looking for any feedback folks are willing to give. Is something improbable due to conflicting lore? Is something to over-the-top or sappy? Let me know! Given this is being posted on an iPhone, I'm going to provide a link to a Google doc instead of putting the contents in a spoiler field. On a final note, apologies in advance for tense being inconsistent in the draft. It wasn't written with the intent of others seeing it, so it some aspects are sort of sloppy.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hQPneZun1nePyXnVZcVQMoIiOfuDUsrrE4CXWqZAJX8/edit?usp=docslist_api
RE: Looking for backstory feedback - Sin - 03-30-2015
Very detailed. Great character
There's a lot to work with there to make her very interesting in roleplay.The only thing that comes to my mind in terms of lore sensitivity is that as juicy and ironic as her mother making ends meet through literary works about her daughter is... I urge you to keep in mind that because of Eorzea's low literacy rates I don't think she'd be making anything considerable from writing, maybe from a particularly enthusiastic patron, but otherwise her clientele would be very limited. Or otherwise she'd need to be -very- popular with the right people to be making considerable gil.
I guess in general I'm just pointing out that you should keep in mind that reading and writing in Eorzea is a bigger deal than in our world, and though you've gone to great lengths to explain certain minor things, you've glossed over a bit how as far as I can tell a common fisherman and a 'Cuda sailor became proficient in the written word.
Anyway, good luck and have fun.
RE: Looking for backstory feedback - Sounsyy - 03-30-2015
I like! Definitely in keeping with the lore. It's obvious you put a good bit of research in. And I wouldn't mind too much with the literacy. While true, literacy rates are quite low in Eorzea, Bloegeim's history with the Knights of the Barracuda provides her with a more than viable reason of why she can read/write.
Great story, hope our characters meet sometime in game! Sounsyy Mirke is an old Knight of the Barracuda-turned-Maelstrom Captain who also fought on Carteneau. And I'm always on the lookout for more Limsa RP for her. ^^
RE: Looking for backstory feedback - Worgendonor - 03-30-2015
(03-30-2015, 01:12 PM)Sin Wrote: Very detailed. Great characterThank you for your kind words and your input!
The only thing that comes to my mind in terms of lore sensitivity is that as juicy and ironic as her mother making ends meet through literary works about her daughter is... I urge you to keep in mind that because of Eorzea's low literacy rates I don't think she'd be making anything considerable from writing, maybe from a particularly enthusiastic patron, but otherwise her clientele would be very limited. Or otherwise she'd need to be -very- popular with the right people to be making considerable gil.
I guess in general I'm just pointing out that you should keep in mind that reading and writing in Eorzea is a bigger deal than in our world, and though you've gone to great lengths to explain certain minor things, you've glossed over a bit how as far as I can tell a common fisherman and a 'Cuda sailor became proficient in the written word.
Anyway, good luck and have fun.
And for pointing out Eorzea's low literacy rates, too. It wasn't something I was aware of, and after finding the Fernehalwes post it came from, that might indeed be a problematic detail. I wouldn't imagine "considerable" being a word I'd apply to what Bloegeim would be making even before you informed me of this, just enough to get by and survive with minimal aid from others, but that still might be stretching reason and need reconsideration. That said, I might have to nix the "mutual love of written word" bit about her parents all together, though. While I think I can probably justify Bloegeim being literate by saying she was of a higher upbringing and sort of chose her lot in life, becoming a 'Cuda more out of a sense of lawful duty than a promise of good income, Fraeceig is a different case entirely.
In any case, revisions will be made. Thank you again for your time and advice!
RE: Looking for backstory feedback - Sin - 03-30-2015
Just because poor ol' Fraceig the fisherman can't read doesn't mean he can't love the written word when read to him by his wife!
In my head, I think it makes it more adorable that this poetry-loving Barracuda taught her partner how to read using love poems.
And now I'm making headcanons for other people's character's parents.
Help me.
RE: Looking for backstory feedback - Worgendonor - 03-30-2015
(03-30-2015, 03:00 PM)Sounsyy Wrote: I like! Definitely in keeping with the lore. It's obvious you put a good bit of research in. And I wouldn't mind too much with the literacy. While true, literacy rates are quite low in Eorzea, Bloegeim's history with the Knights of the Barracuda provides her with a more than viable reason of why she can read/write.
Great story, hope our characters meet sometime in game! Sounsyy Mirke is an old Knight of the Barracuda-turned-Maelstrom Captain who also fought on Carteneau. And I'm always on the lookout for more Limsa RP for her. ^^
Thank you! I do suppose that's true, a 'Cuda probably would need at least someone in their ranks with the know-how to read or write, as I'd imagine missives were probably sent to whatever was their Command before the reinstatement of the Maelstrom as well as to other Levies.
On another note, I hope we meet too! I'd be glad to send you a whisper sometime in-game, see if you're free and up for RP. Probably won't be anytime soon though, still need to get Bhaldwyb to 50 and get the gear I want for her.
(03-30-2015, 04:11 PM)Sin Wrote: Just because poor ol' Fraceig the fisherman can't read doesn't mean he can't love the written word when read to him by his wife!
In my head, I think it makes it more adorable that this poetry-loving Barracuda taught her partner how to read using love poems.
And now I'm making headcanons for other people's character's parents.
Help me.
And that doesn't have to be headcanon! It is adorable, and I'm tempted to steal it.
RE: Looking for backstory feedback - Marisa - 03-30-2015
(03-30-2015, 04:11 PM)Sin Wrote: Just because poor ol' Fraceig the fisherman can't read doesn't mean he can't love the written word when read to him by his wife!
In my head, I think it makes it more adorable that this poetry-loving Barracuda taught her partner how to read using love poems.
And now I'm making headcanons for other people's character's parents.
Help me.
This raises a good point about literacy in Eorzea. True enough that most would have no formal education, but you really only need one person who can read per village. Then that guy can read aloud to everyone at town meetings and whatnot.Â
I'm thinking this needs to be explored more.