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Character Critiques? - Chakha Malqir - 07-17-2013
Heya! So Xenedra suggested I start up a thread asking for character critiques in this board. So here's what I have thus far. I appreciate any critiques I get! Thank you very much!
I should note that I plan on working on that "100 Questions" list as well to further flesh this out. But this is a rough idea.
RE: Character Critiques? - Nova - 07-17-2013
I can't really say to much on any lore, most of my lore knowledge is of the area's outside the three main city states. But I like the character background, especially the way you choose to name your Miqo'te.The whole thing seems pretty well thought out. Your character grew up in Limsa Lominsa? My character moved to upper La Noscea when she was in her teens, maybe they've run into each other in the past
 I also like your ideas, on future arcs. I look forward to seeing how your characters story unfolds.
RE: Character Critiques? - Jayce Lightfall - 07-17-2013
Told you in Skype already. But I really enjoyed your character's background. In my limited knowledge it doesn't break lore and has a well thought out story for his naming. I look forward to seeing your 100 Questions when you get done!
RE: Character Critiques? - Chakha Malqir - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 04:49 AM)Nova Wrote: I can't really say to much on any lore, most of my lore knowledge is of the area's outside the three main city states. But I like the character background, especially the way you choose to name your Miqo'te.The whole thing seems pretty well thought out. Your character grew up in Limsa Lominsa? My character moved to upper La Noscea when she was in her teens, maybe they've run into each other in the past
I also like your ideas, on future arcs. I look forward to seeing how your characters story unfolds.
Thank you very much! OOC, I didn't want to use the traditional Miqo'te naming conventions because they left very very little to the imagination due to being so strict. So I weaseled out a way to at least borrow the naming conventions of other races' cultures.
Virgil could have certainly met your character in the past! Though he never really liked being around the other kids all that much and preferred to stay indoors (his dislike of the sunlight comes from his Keeper side). So unless you character liked hanging around libraries and other areas with indoor activities within Limsa, it might not be too likely.
I hope to play out the future arcs a bit while also taking things slow and even participating in others' arcs while they would participate in mine.
(07-17-2013, 04:57 AM)Jayce Lightfall Wrote: Told you in Skype already. But I really enjoyed your character's background. In my limited knowledge it doesn't break lore and has a well thought out story for his naming. I look forward to seeing your 100 Questions when you get done!
Thanks a bunch! I'll do my best to get them finished ASAP!
RE: Character Critiques? - LeCard - 07-17-2013
Just something I noticed that could make things seem a little odd, lore wise, is that you have the father a keeper and the mother a seeker (both the subordinate gender for their kind). This could be funny, in that they are fighting to name the child after the other person instead of the norm of trying to get the kid named after yourself, but it does present the issue of having neither one of them in a traditional position to say that the child should be raised one way or another.
not saying that it should/ needs to be changed, just something to think about as your work on their back story. the other option being to have two dominate genders for parents(if you keep the mixed idea).(also, the "moon thief" title could have another meaning if the father is a seeker stealing away a keeper from her tribe)
RE: Character Critiques? - Chakha Malqir - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 09:08 PM)LeCard Wrote: Just something I noticed that could make things seem a little odd, lore wise, is that you have the father a keeper and the mother a seeker (both the subordinate gender for their kind). This could be funny, in that they are fighting to name the child after the other person instead of the norm of trying to get the kid named after yourself, but it does present the issue of having neither one of them in a traditional position to say that the child should be raised one way or another.
not saying that it should/ needs to be changed, just something to think about as your work on their back story. the other option being to have two dominate genders for parents(if you keep the mixed idea).(also, the "moon thief" title could have another meaning if the father is a seeker stealing away a keeper from her tribe)
You know, it wouldn't be all that hard to change the genders of the parents in the story entirely to correct this misconception, having the mother be the headstrong, chivalrous thief and the father be the one who cares for the child. It'd also serve to promote headstrong women in my backstory moreso than Virgil's Roegadyn godmother.
I kinda like that idea. Thanks!
RE: Character Critiques? - LeCard - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 10:06 PM)HakuroDK Wrote:(07-17-2013, 09:08 PM)LeCard Wrote: Just something I noticed that could make things seem a little odd, lore wise, is that you have the father a keeper and the mother a seeker (both the subordinate gender for their kind). This could be funny, in that they are fighting to name the child after the other person instead of the norm of trying to get the kid named after yourself, but it does present the issue of having neither one of them in a traditional position to say that the child should be raised one way or another.
not saying that it should/ needs to be changed, just something to think about as your work on their back story. the other option being to have two dominate genders for parents(if you keep the mixed idea).(also, the "moon thief" title could have another meaning if the father is a seeker stealing away a keeper from her tribe)
You know, it wouldn't be all that hard to change the genders of the parents in the story entirely to correct this misconception, having the mother be the headstrong, chivalrous thief and the father be the one who cares for the child. It'd also serve to promote headstrong women in my backstory moreso than Virgil's Roegadyn godmother.
I kinda like that idea. Thanks!
Happy to be of any help I can. Ferreting out little details on lore is something I do for fun, so if you get further stuff for me to look over feel free to pm me or something. Also, don't take anything I suggest as a must, it is just something to think about so that you have an answer for any questions that could come up down the road about why you picked option A instead of b,c,d,e,or f. or maybe you picked E and someone wonders why not A.
RE: Character Critiques? - Desmond Aryll - 07-17-2013
Sounds really interesting! I like the idea of organically incorporating your level gains in your personal story.
Question, how would you go about "meeting" your relatives? Would you have a fellow RP'er take on the role temporarily? I ask because your ideas somewhat inspire me to branch out and with a little help from others, really take it to another level.
RE: Character Critiques? - Chakha Malqir - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 10:21 PM)Desmond Aryll Wrote: Sounds really interesting! I like the idea of organically incorporating your level gains in your personal story.
Question, how would you go about "meeting" your relatives? Would you have a fellow RP'er take on the role temporarily? I ask because your ideas somewhat inspire me to branch out and with a little help from others, really take it to another level.
"Meeting" relatives would certainly require a LOT of imagination. Not sure how I'd do it yet, other than asking for everyone to use the power of suspension of disbelief and pretend she's there.
RE: Character Critiques? - Desmond Aryll - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 10:37 PM)HakuroDK Wrote: "Meeting" relatives would certainly require a LOT of imagination. Not sure how I'd do it yet, other than asking for everyone to use the power of suspension of disbelief and pretend she's there.
It presents the question that if one were to get the premium sub, you can roll 4 chars in any world, so does that mean 4 chars at any one time or 4 chars created for any given world period??
Because if it's the former, well then you can have a trusted RP'er go over a detailed bio on the mother for example and have yourself a real role-playing session! Oh the possibilities! Of course that's only if you can scrub chars and make new ones.
RE: Character Critiques? - Naunet - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 10:44 PM)Desmond Aryll Wrote: It presents the question that if one were to get the premium sub, you can roll 4 chars in any world, so does that mean 4 chars at any one time or 4 chars created for any given world period??Pretty sure with the full $15 per month, you get 8 characters per server, which is still too few IMO but what can one do. Some day a game will get rid of silly server limitations...
RE: Character Critiques? - Desmond Aryll - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 10:53 PM)Naunet Wrote: Pretty sure with the full $15 per month, you get 8 characters per server, which is still too few IMO but what can one do. Some day a game will get rid of silly server limitations...
I'm happy to be corrected on that point.
If it is eight per world, then it seems like it would be doable to extend a helping hand to a fellow Rp'er sometime!
RE: Character Critiques? - Chakha Malqir - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 11:01 PM)Desmond Aryll Wrote:That would be pretty nice.(07-17-2013, 10:53 PM)Naunet Wrote: Pretty sure with the full $15 per month, you get 8 characters per server, which is still too few IMO but what can one do. Some day a game will get rid of silly server limitations...
I'm happy to be corrected on that point.
If it is eight per world, then it seems like it would be doable to extend a helping hand to a fellow Rp'er sometime!
And I might even oblige someone else similarly. It's only good karma.
RE: Character Critiques? - Desmond Aryll - 07-17-2013
RP teamwork ftw! Maybe it can be coordinated after launch.
Ps, it really is getting harder and harder to wait to play again....
RE: Character Critiques? - doctorgalactic - 07-17-2013
(07-17-2013, 11:13 PM)Desmond Aryll Wrote: RP teamwork ftw! Maybe it can be coordinated after launch.I love this idea!
Ps, it really is getting harder and harder to wait to play again....