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http://wiki.ffxiv-roleplayers.com/pages/Kale_Aideron
I've always felt that constructing characters are no good if no one else appreciates them, if they're purely a vessel for the creator's indulgence. So, on that, I present my wiki page to you for your consideration. My first issue is repetition. I've tried to throw in a lot of 'buzz words' that I feel a Kale's main traits, but I can't help feel there's some extraneous sections that just try to hammer in the same crap over and over again. Where are they? What can be removed, and/or merged?
The second thing is his alignment, Lawful Neutral vs Lawful Good. The intention is LN, not LG, and a couple have said already the article makes him sound LG. It might be so narrow that by this point it would be a matter of personal discretion, but my interpretation of LG is that it is adherence to a transcendent code over LN's adherence to a societal code. Curious to thoughts on that.
Anyway, I like to think it's clear the stylistic intentions I'm going for with that article. Please point out anything you'd like to comment on and make suggestions, I'd appreciate it! Be "brutally constructive"!
Finally, presuming our characters have met, if you add a rumour under Player-Character rumours, I'll be sure to add one to your profile as well!!
http://wiki.ffxiv-roleplayers.com/pages/Kale_Aideron
I've always felt that constructing characters are no good if no one else appreciates them, if they're purely a vessel for the creator's indulgence. So, on that, I present my wiki page to you for your consideration. My first issue is repetition. I've tried to throw in a lot of 'buzz words' that I feel a Kale's main traits, but I can't help feel there's some extraneous sections that just try to hammer in the same crap over and over again. Where are they? What can be removed, and/or merged?
The second thing is his alignment, Lawful Neutral vs Lawful Good. The intention is LN, not LG, and a couple have said already the article makes him sound LG. It might be so narrow that by this point it would be a matter of personal discretion, but my interpretation of LG is that it is adherence to a transcendent code over LN's adherence to a societal code. Curious to thoughts on that.
Anyway, I like to think it's clear the stylistic intentions I'm going for with that article. Please point out anything you'd like to comment on and make suggestions, I'd appreciate it! Be "brutally constructive"!
Finally, presuming our characters have met, if you add a rumour under Player-Character rumours, I'll be sure to add one to your profile as well!!
