(09-21-2015, 10:27 AM)Warren Castille Wrote: It only sounds like an issue if you're in it to win instead of telling an interesting story. The whole concept of trying to write someone into a corner with a "tactical checkmate" reeks of AOL speed-posting bullshit from 1997.Actually warren, Ig explained exactly what the grammatical issues are. A lot of people take grammar in RP as rule.
I've always felt someone should give as good as they get. If you randomly get into a fight with a stranger and they're completely no-selling reasonable attack posts because they're just that good, they're not trying to have a dramatic scene, they're trying to measure their dick in public.
My memories of that era are not fond.
I personally don't like that sentence because it is two actions in one. My character could have long since moved away between the drawing of the sword and the swing toward the neck, but I feel forced to ignore the space and emote a response as if it is one action. If you try to take advantage of the present tense lock, people start getting upset.
If he draws the sword and swings it at my neck, but I moved as he was drawing his sword, what is he swinging at? Is he slow?
Of course you could add some description like, he draws his sword fast as a whip and in one motion slashes at my neck. Then there is fluidity.
