(09-21-2015, 04:17 PM)Ignacius Wrote: In Kage's original example, in my personal opinion, the form is good. Â You'd want to dive at someone as if you intend to tackle them, because although you might not actually tackle them, that denotes a very particular and descriptive action as opposed to just diving at someone's legs. Â I mean, you can infer that it's in a tackling motion, but you may want to dive between them, come up like a football player and aim for the chin, roll through and try to end up on the other side. Â That's endemic to the form, but I also find that it's good for the way I write. Â It saves you from having to OOC out what will happen or even what it will look like. Â People get a very distinct picture.So this was my example.
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Kage Kiryuu would throw himself at the ground and then tackle the others' feet in an attempt to make him stumble.Personally, I would write this and not even think twice about it (and also prefer to write it in these two possible ways).
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Kage Kiryuu threw himself at the ground with the aim of tackling the others' feet in an attempt to make him stumble.Code: (Select All)
Kage Kiryuu throws himself at the ground, aiming to tackle the others' feet in an attempt to make him stumble.I'm curious, and since you seem to have far more experience with the possible reasoning, why would you prefer the opening post example over the other two if we stick with the format? Or, what makes it more preferable to the others?
For me, there's still ways for the other to 'interrupt' the aim and Kage's throwing of his body. Attempting to catch him mid-air, kicking him etc.
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(09-21-2015, 04:16 PM)Flickering Ember Wrote: "People don't think" is the answer to many of life's questions.Which is not good or bad really. People are not omniscient. What one may not notice, someone else might.I'm sorry, but I fail to see what your point is. If you dislike the topic or see no reason then to say "It is what it is," then I also fail to see what value you have to the discussion and why you choose to stay.
