(05-31-2016, 07:53 AM)Valence Wrote: Draft 1 sounds reasonable and with potential to me. Problem solved by saying that the character got among refugees that fled Othard during her early chilhood before the test, and got abandonned after once in Eorzea as part of the traditions the family still clings to. It can even explain why the test was failed since it's a foreign land for everyone. Since some time must have past so that she is not a child anymore, it still fits considering that we have examples of xaelas that left/fled Othard way before the recent annihilation of Dhoma (and the Xaen lands).
Can also be mixed up with some stuff of draft 2/3, like the resentment against the test that the family insisted to do even in such extreme circumstances, for example.
The DRK mentor appearance can be inserted anywhere from there.
I haven't thought about it that way, thank you! It does help me get some inspiration going and I think I got myself a fourth draft out of it.
I am more confident about this one and it will probably be the one I use, but I am still open to more feedback and criticism, as always!
