(06-07-2017, 10:45 AM)Nero Wrote: Overall background looks decent. It might be interesting to integrate some folklore into the background.
The question I have for you is why specifically you want this character to be a Black Mage or Red Mage? What facet of your character does being a Black Mage or Red Mage express? Is it to be an expert in forbidden magics? Why specifically some form of black magic? Why does this character need to be a black mage as opposed to someone who's learned a different form of thaumaturgy?
Further, if your character isn't trained as a thaumaturge, how would she be able to use black magic? She's trained in the "occult arts", but that seems to be more along the line of things like alchemy and divining rather than destructive magic.
Encyclopedia Eorzea Wrote:The wisdom contained in a soul crystal, however, is not so easily drawn forth- an untrained neophyte can not simply pick one up one of these gems and expect his mind to be flooded with the knowledge of advanced spellcraft or combat techniques. Without first attaining sufficient proficiency and tempering one's soul to mirror the maturity of the crystal's contributors, a prospective student will be denied even the slightest glimpse of enlightenment. Thus, as is the case with the more contemporary disciplines, the key to mastering the secrets of a soul crystal lies in diligent study and training.
As for your goals.
Finding a black mage soulstone seems a bit contrived. Your character would have to be looking in very specific places; the ruins of Mhach in Yafaem, perhaps. If you go this route, bear in mind the ,"when, why, how" of travelling to these places.
For your second goal: think about what the role of a mentor would represent. What reasons would a Black Mage character have to adopt your character as a potential apprentice instead of, say, someone already well-versed in thaumaturgy? What kind of person would this potential Black Mage have to be in order to accept your character over others?
The third goal is simply implausible to me. Black mage soulstones (which may or may not be called Gems of Shatotto, depending on your interpretations) are required to use black magic without dying; if it was possible to make a functioning replica, I think someone else would have done so by now.
For the fourth goal, see above: why is it necessary for this character to learn black magic in some form?
Thanks for the feedback. You've given me plenty to consider. I do want to clarify that when I say "dark" or "occult" arts, I was thinking of some form of far eastern thaumaturgy equivalent. As for Black Mage, I suggested it because I couldn't think of any other form of high dark magic that exists within the Final Fantasy framework.
Again, thanks. I think this character is going to take some serious work before she's ready for public RP.
