(08-14-2013, 01:41 AM)Murlona Wrote: I enjoyed it and was asking myself a couple times "Oh what happened? What happened next?" which I think is part of the mystery you wanted, eh?xD Thanks.
Your writing is a little choppy sometimes but I think it adds more to an emotional POV feel than to a story feel.
Speaking of which.. Felix has great chops.
I -kinda- wrote it to be choppy because, well.. When you dream, you dream in segments usually, you know?
Like, when you wake up you wonder how you got where you were in your dream. There is a lot of missing pieces.
As I said, I'm not good at writing longer stories and making them flow nicely. Shorter it is the better quality for me usually. So I am sure that is part of it, too.
Felix Sideris
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