Your story made me smile! I wasn't expecting a slice-of-FFXIV-life esque tale like this, but I enjoyed how it turned out. I liked how you wrote from different perspectives throughout the story; from the Chocobo's point-of-view was especially interesting since you changed your writing style to shorter bursts of thought and what I felt was a more simple vocabulary.
At first, it was a bit difficult to place who was what in the story, particularly which character was the Stablemaster and which were the Stablehands. I managed to figure it out after a few quick glances, though. Other than that, it transitioned from one part to another quite smoothly and had a fitting conclusion. You could stop there and it would feel complete, but will you be creating more stories about Stalwart Soul and his master in the future?
What was your inspiration to write this? Was it based-loosely around when you acquired your first Chocobo? Also, thanks for the read! I'm looking forward to your work in the future!
At first, it was a bit difficult to place who was what in the story, particularly which character was the Stablemaster and which were the Stablehands. I managed to figure it out after a few quick glances, though. Other than that, it transitioned from one part to another quite smoothly and had a fitting conclusion. You could stop there and it would feel complete, but will you be creating more stories about Stalwart Soul and his master in the future?
What was your inspiration to write this? Was it based-loosely around when you acquired your first Chocobo? Also, thanks for the read! I'm looking forward to your work in the future!
