I think you have an awesome writing style. Very descriptive, yet subtle at the same time. I can see what's happening and I especially liked the ending. Not sure if you edited your story or not, but I feel like the scene transitions were just fine. I interpreted it as your character recalling fragmented moments during.Â
For example, if we were all to look back on memories we've had, we rarely remember the whole picture. We probably only remember only a portion of what was actually happening at the moment. I'm not sure if that was your intention, but that's how I envisioned it.
For example, if we were all to look back on memories we've had, we rarely remember the whole picture. We probably only remember only a portion of what was actually happening at the moment. I'm not sure if that was your intention, but that's how I envisioned it.
"What more can I say to sway him?
To make this statue speak?
I swear he's made of stone and I,
am barely stirring up a breeze."
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To make this statue speak?
I swear he's made of stone and I,
am barely stirring up a breeze."
Character Blog
