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The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge]

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Desmond Aryll Desmond Aryll Find all posts by this user The Red Stag Posts:365 Joined:Jul 2013 Character:Desmond Aryll Linkshell:Driftwood Coast Server:Gilgamesh Reputation: 19 RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] | #12 10-18-2013, 04:34 PM (10-17-2013, 05:33 AM)Tobias Nightbringer Wrote: (10-15-2013, 02:54 PM)Desmond Aryll Wrote: I look forward to reading the Song Challenge thread when its up. You really did a great job on the imagery. Can't wait to read more. The thread is now up! I probably will do some more tweaking to it, but there ya have it! Also! P.S. I changed up the last part of story so I HOPE it is much more of a clear transition and flow xD Nice job. The change in your word choices to something more grounded also "break the spell" of the dream we just read. The imagery breaks for the reader like it breaks for the poor soul in the infirmary. Great stuff.

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The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Tobias Nightbringer - 10-15-2013, 07:50 AM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Lady Whiteraven - 10-15-2013, 09:21 AM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Brave - 10-15-2013, 09:46 AM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Desmond Aryll - 10-15-2013, 10:28 AM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Tobias Nightbringer - 10-15-2013, 02:32 PM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Desmond Aryll - 10-15-2013, 02:54 PM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Tobias Nightbringer - 10-17-2013, 05:33 AM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Lament - 10-18-2013, 03:48 AM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Tobias Nightbringer - 10-18-2013, 02:10 PM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Lament - 10-18-2013, 03:30 PM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Vito - 10-18-2013, 04:21 PM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Desmond Aryll - 10-18-2013, 04:34 PM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Tobias Nightbringer - 10-19-2013, 03:02 PM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Lady Whiteraven - 10-19-2013, 03:32 PM RE: The Dance [Story/OOC Comments and Critique STRONGLY Encouraged] [Song Challenge] - by Tobias Nightbringer - 10-23-2013, 02:09 PM

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