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CrimsonMars · **08-09-2013, 09:09 PM**

Is there a place were I can receive feedback for the characters I created to make sure they are constant with the lore and such?

I already have a rough-draft for my main character's profile and have plans of making another. I would like to make sure her background makes sense before I throw her out in the world.

Ildur · **08-09-2013, 09:18 PM**

There are quite a few threads requesting feedback on character concepts using this very same sub-forum.

CrimsonMars · **08-09-2013, 09:20 PM**

Really? I thought there would at least be a thread about that, lol.

So should I just show you what I've got?

Khaine · **08-09-2013, 09:26 PM**

Yeah, I am interested in reading what you got.

CrimsonMars · **08-09-2013, 09:33 PM**

Here it is. I'm think about changing her name as well.

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Falkner · **08-09-2013, 09:47 PM**

Ohohoho! A Miqo'te who really likes to eat! Sounds like a fun feline if we meet in game, especially if it's in a food stall or something, we could start some commotion. Big Grin

oh and what is exactly gonna happens if her tail is pulled... let's say, intentionally?

The shortened "Chi" for her name is cutesy enough if it fits your concept of her.
Maybe you could build around it for a more lore-friendly name if it's what you want?

About the tail, wasn't Miqo'te's tail contributes to the race's sense of balance? Does it gimps her in a way if her tail is wrapped around the waist instead?

Ildur · **08-09-2013, 11:27 PM**

Well, the background is a bit bareboned, but nothing life-threatening or extremely lore disrupting.

You might want to come up for a reason for her current name. Other characters might think it's strange for someone to not follow conventions and ask about it, so it's best for you to prepare to have an IC reason for it. Being raised for Roegadyn would work well if the name followed Roegadyn conventions. But since that is not the case, you'll have to come with something else.

These are some questions that sprung to mind when reading the bio. While it's not imperative for you to have answers for all or any of them, I think you should ponder about them. They will help you flesh her history a bit more:

-Where did she and her foster family live? Was it in the city, a village? In the wilderness? And if so, was there any civilization close by?
-Were they part of a larger community, like a clan or a village? If so, can you describe it briefly?
-What do her foster parents do for a living?
-Where did she learn martial arts? Is she self-taught? Did she had a teacher? And if she had, who was he? Is he significant?
-How and why did she lose her memory? (You don't need to write this in the public biography, but you should know the answer)
-Who are her real parents? Is it significant who they were? IE. do you intend, as a player, for it to ever come up?

Khaine · **08-09-2013, 11:37 PM**

(08-09-2013, 11:27 PM)Ildur Wrote: Well, the background is a bit bareboned, but nothing life-threatening or extremely lore disrupting.

You might want to come up for a reason for her current name. Other characters might think it's strange for someone to not follow conventions and ask about it, so it's best for you to prepare to have an IC reason for it. Being raised for Roegadyn would work well if the name followed Roegadyn conventions. But since that is not the case, you'll have to come with something else.

These are some questions that sprung to mind when reading the bio. While it's not imperative for you to have answers for all or any of them, I think you should ponder about them. They will help you flesh her history a bit more:

-Where did she and her foster family live? Was it in the city, a village? In the wilderness? And if so, was there any civilization close by?
-Were they part of a larger community, like a clan or a village? If so, can you describe it briefly?
-What do her foster parents do for a living?
-Where did she learn martial arts? Is she self-taught? Did she had a teacher? Â And if she had, who was he? Is he significant?
-How and why did she lose her memory? (You don't need to write this in the public biography, but you should know the answer)
-Who are her real parents? Is it significant who they were? IE. do you intend, as a player, for it to ever come up?

He has a point as far as the naming convention and pretty much everything he stated. Since she is seeker you could use the Letter followed by ' . Given she would actually know her birth name it would give clues as to which tribe to track down to maybe learn the truth. If she did not know her name she might have fallen under the Hellsguard naming convention. This is something you might want to consider given how she would of obtained the name she uses.

CrimsonMars · **08-10-2013, 09:37 AM**

It was hard for me to find a Sun Seeker name that I actually like, but I guess I'll try again, maybe merge my original name with the new one.

I'll try my best to answer these questions by adding more to her profile. Hopefully, it'll turn out better.

Ashren Dotharl · **08-10-2013, 09:42 AM**

http://fandango.exp.jp/name-generator.php

Here's a link that might help you a little with coming up with a name for your Sunseeker.

CrimsonMars · **08-10-2013, 12:49 PM**

I've reworked Chiyo's history quite a bit. I hope it makes more sense to you.

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On a side note, how does anyone feel about ex-Garlean Empire members? (regarding my second character)

Ildur · **08-10-2013, 01:17 PM**

That's much better. Allow me to give you this brownie of approval!

I will point you out to the very useful 100 questions thread here. Do not feel like you must answer any or all of them; it's hardly needed and they are a lot of questions. I'm just linking it here because many of them will make you think about things you probably wouldn't ponder about otherwise. Just don't try to answer them all on one day; take your time to ponder about the answers. You could also skip questions if you think they don't add any depth to your character.
It's a good thought exercise, even if you chose not to answer them at all.

About ex-garleans: it depends on how you justify their background. If you are going for a deserter, you'll want to consider that garlean military training is very harsh and designed to make zealots for the empire. You might want to go for a civilian instead, since, while they are likely subject to imperial propaganda anyway, it would be on a lesser degree.
It's different if you go for a garlean spy: someone who has lived in Eorzean society for a long time might be able to get past the imperial preconceptions (thanks to personal experiences and the lack of ideological propaganda) and decide that the Empire is actually a bad thing.

CrimsonMars · **08-10-2013, 01:38 PM**

Thanks. Glad it turned out decent. Smile

Is it possible for that said character to be an Elezen? Seeing as how they are the natives in Eorzea, I'd imagine it would be pretty weird.

Ildur · **08-10-2013, 02:07 PM**

Back in 1.0, you could see garlean mooks of various races, so I wouldn't worry about his race at all. I think one of their high ranking officers, the leader of a whole Legion, was actually an elezen, so you are good on it. It is implied, though, that garleans might have a predominant Hyur population (because garlean Hyur mooks are more plentiful than mooks of other races).

CrimsonMars · **08-10-2013, 02:22 PM**

Oh yeah, I was actually thinking she might have been exiled in some way. Would that be good?

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