(09-23-2014, 11:20 PM)Aldotsk Wrote: I am trying to make a character who is sleeping in a void embryo inside the Lost City of Amdapor, but when couple of characters visit the place - the embryo tends to break, and the girl happens to be in a dormant sleeping state who does not remember anything that has happened to her, but her only existence and her abilities show that she is clearly a white mage. Would this plot be even valid and legit enough that I can actually create a white mage?Â
I am rather curious and no, this is not a troll question because I am highly convinced that I want to make a white mage character in a sense that it supports it.
Technically, you can make anything work so long as you don't go over the top and have phenomenal cosmic powers. I have to agree though, a character sleeping in the Lost City, while original, would in many ways come off like a mary sue for several reasons:
1) Being that she's a white mage, amnesia or not, she is going to have a pivotal role in the world's existence since the white mage's are all but gone.
2) When you have to ask: 'how did she seal herself', 'why did she seal herself', 'why did she suffer amnesia', ect. and you are the creator of the story asking for confirmation, you're basically tossing a rock into the dark hoping it won't hit something. Again, it just sounds like she's way too important.
I could go on and on, but I advise that if you polish the story and play it carefully you might make this work. Telling people on the forums or OOCly in the game will kind of destroy the magic and mystery of the character. It never hurts to just make the character, role play it out at an early level and see what others think of it based on interactions.
If there are a lot of negative comments, chances are it kind of won't be accepted. If you can get away with it, then you clearly played it carefully and ought to continue.
In the end, it's up to you and how to tell the story. I personally think it's way too over the top but that doesn't mean you can't make it work. Surprise us all.Â
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