(10-18-2016, 06:17 PM)Caspar Wrote:Oh no that whole voidsent thing is gone, it wad just an idea i was playing with in my head. So that's no longer an issue(10-18-2016, 05:56 PM)Vincent Sarkoza Wrote: yeah i figured as much lol, the backstory thing i was just curious about. If it werent you guys i was probably gonna kill it anyway. That aside though, are the gear too far fetched?
Speaking only of the gear, it's probably not so much any single item he uses so much as the combination of then all at once.
You should consider doing as Verad suggested and not worrying about keeping a detailed inventory, and/or narrowing it down to the few you really want him to use.
Thematically it is a very busy sheet. It's my opinion that the various abilities and items he carries clash with one another on a conceptual level. The Ninja are supposed to be stealthy but his unique skill turns you into a voidsent, which are abomination to Eorzea and draw considerable negative attention. It clashes conceptually with the existing mudra abilities. He's a Doman shinobi as far as I can tell, but his gear seems optimized for big fights and explosions. Not that Ninja can't do this mind you, it just seems kinda random and not very fitting.
Above all else, pay attention to the "what, why, how" of your character's abilities. What narrative purpose do these gadgets serve? Why does his clan have voidsent transformation on their menu? How did he master so many weapons at a young age and what consequences were there? Look at every aspect of your character and ask yourself if it's really needed, or just there because you think it's cool. You will find by paring things down to abilities that are thematically consistent with each other and the world, it gives you more room to develop him and wider options RP wise.
. Focusing on the gear though i got my inspiration from batman, modern close quarterd combat, and gear that could possibly help mobility. I have been wondering if it's too many things yes so that's still something im working on. Â It's not on here but vincent fights using gadgets, weapons, and ninjustsu in conjunction with one another. I havent had any complaints during rp fights fighting like that so i guess that's good. I was thinking everything listed would be him fully kitted expecting a fight and his chosen equipment depends on the missions and situations he expects to encounter.The gear list was updated as a result of rp fights that almost killed him so he he felt h needed more advanced equipment to be able to keep up with the times.
