Ghunzyr Wrote:I love it, great story! Your description of the fight seen came of fairly smooth, which is saying a lot. Most people, in my opinion, can't write action scenes well.Thank you, that was probably the section of the story that took the longest to fit together in a way that actually flowed.
Ghunzyr Wrote:The only issues I could see offhand were a few minor grammatical errors, and I don't really care about those as I make them all the time myself so can't truely hold them over anyone else's head.Heh, that's why I'm going to try to find an editor at some point if I do keep on writing, it's their job to catch those things!!
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