Hinoto-no-Ryuji

Seems like there's an updated (and much more complete) version kicking about:

Wow, thanks for the feedback, Sounsyy! Ah, yeah, I'll admit to coming up with the population figure on the fly, and probably should have done more in the way of researching Edo-era population demographics. The idea - which I didn't get into a whole lot - is that Teibo and the others weren't regional powerhouses, but weren't completely insignificant either. A cursory look tells me that a population of could probably be reduced to something like a thousand people or less and still fit that bill, and would make it a bit more believable that it could slip through the cracks as an isolated mountain village. Regarding location, I figured it made the most sense to situate Teibo in Yanxia for cultural/racial reasons, and originally - back before we had our current map and I was operating off of Encyclopedia descriptions - it actually *was* the furthest north (but I had assumed the Steppe to be in the western half of the continent, rather than the bulk of the north). My reasoning behind it having not been discovered was its own self-imposed uninvolvement and isolation - surely Garlemald, occupied by frontline warfare against a dedicated resistance, wouldn't put much effort towards scouring mountainside villages if there was no sign of anything that could cause them trouble, and afterwards would be more focused on securing the major points of occupation as they rebuilt their military strength for the Eorzean campaign? But it does seem to be a bit too out in the open, for sure. Perhaps having it exist a bit more among the interior of the Fanged Crescent, rather than at its foot, would make things more believable? Or, perhaps, have them know about Teibo but not consider it worth the soldiers until a different Legion is put in charge of the region. I actually did toy with the idea of having Ryuji live in an occupied Teibo for a time before departing, but I couldn't think of a good reason for Kagetora to wait (especially since sending Ryuji would be more difficult with an entrenched Imperial presence), and I wanted the timing to line up so that Ryuji would be arriving just in time for ARR to start. I'll give thought to a different catalyst, though, or maybe find a way to delay his departure from Greylic's Bend so that the Empire could discover Teibo closer to the conclusion of their war effort. So, in summary: (1) Reduce the population of Teibo (which I should do anyways) and/or place it further within the Fanged Crescent; or (2) Have the Empire discover and occupy Teibo earlier (a year or two after Doma falls, perhaps?), with a different catalyst for Ryuji behind sent abroad; or (3) Have the Empire discover and occupy Teibo earlier, and have Ryuji's odyssey across Othard take longer. This is a great point, and very easily rectified, too; I can always have the refugee smuggling take place under the nose of the Imperial forces and make it so that they were recently found out, and not need to change anything else. Definitely something I'll be changing! And yeah, Ryuji needs fleshing out. I've noticed there are quite a few tools around this site to help with that, so I'll be making use of those, along with applying some of the advice given by Nebbs. Thanks again! Also, a quick request - do you have a full version of that labeled map that you posted? Trying to find a decent-quality one with the labels translated proved pretty trying when I was working on this.

Thanks! It's true, I definitely approached this with more of an eye to the backstory than the character himself (like I said, not much of a roleplayer), but all of that is stuff I hadn't considered either way, and you've got me thinking. I'll have to go about fleshing out Ryuji himself as a person now ^^

Hey everyone! First-time poster here. I'm not much of a roleplayer, but I enjoy crafting characters and their stories and having a sense of who I'm playing as and where they came from. To that end, I've been putting together a backstory of Ryuji, my character, and have it all typed up here. What I'm interested in now is a bit of feedback. I want to know what people experienced in this sort of thing think of it on like...a conceptual level. Too complicated? Too generic? On the right track? Also, I'd like to make sure I'm getting the details right; while I think I have a pretty solid grasp on the game's world and name lore, it couldn't hurt to make sure everything fits within it. Anyways, it's little more than a summary, character list, map, and timeline, and it's kinda lengthy, but I'd love to hear what you all think!