Looking for feedback on WikiProfile, please!

[Tamm'lin]

I'm new to FF, but not to roleplaying - So, while I know how to go about making a fleshed out profile, something seems missing from this one. Would anyone mind looking it over and giving critique? 

 

Thank you!

 

Tamm'lin Maertena

[Nero]

Beyond extremely minor technical gripes--I am not sure "dole" is the correct word to use where you used it--the premise of your character is simple and good, which I approve of. Simplicity is often overlooked but is something I find far preferable to convoluted and overelaborate backstories (ironically enough).

 

Off the top of my head, here are some questions and observations to help you add to it, if you wish. Feel free to take or ignore them as you will!

 

-She was at odds with her clan but the actual reasons beyond simple personality conflict are unclear to the reader. Assuming that her reasons for not meshing with her clan aren't meant to be ambiguous, does she have a problem with authority, or just the authority of her clan at the time? Did she have a personal distaste for one or more particular members of the clan? Are there any notable conflicts in her past?

 

-She clearly appreciates individual freedom over a rigid lifestyle, but does this philosophy extend to others or just to herself (i.e. would she try to free slaves if given the opportunity with risk appropriately factored)? Does she have a reason or other external driving factor for why she feels this way or is it something merely intrinsic in her personality?

 

-Her name isn't a typical Seeker name. Is there a story behind her name? Was she given it, or did she choose it herself?

 

-What skills has she learned, how did she learn them, and why? (Necessity, interest, "just for the hell of it", etc.)

 

-How has her being raised in a traditional Seeker clan affected her world view and opinions, if at all? For example, does she have an aversion to things that remind her of said clan?

 

-Does she have any other notable hobbies outside of her "Likes"? I can see her playing pranks fairly easily.

[Tamm'lin]

Beyond extremely minor technical gripes--I am not sure "dole" is the correct word to use where you used it--the premise of your character is simple and good, which I approve of. Simplicity is often overlooked but is something I find far preferable to convoluted and overelaborate backstories (ironically enough).

 

Off the top of my head, here are some questions and observations to help you add to it, if you wish. Feel free to take or ignore them as you will!

 

-She was at odds with her clan but the actual reasons beyond simple personality conflict are unclear to the reader. Assuming that her reasons for not meshing with her clan aren't meant to be ambiguous, does she have a problem with authority, or just the authority of her clan at the time? Did she have a personal distaste for one or more particular members of the clan? Are there any notable conflicts in her past?

 

-She clearly appreciates individual freedom over a rigid lifestyle, but does this philosophy extend to others or just to herself (i.e. would she try to free slaves if given the opportunity with risk appropriately factored)? Does she have a reason or other external driving factor for why she feels this way or is it something merely intrinsic in her personality?

 

-Her name isn't a typical Seeker name. Is there a story behind her name? Was she given it, or did she choose it herself?

 

-What skills has she learned, how did she learn them, and why? (Necessity, interest, "just for the hell of it", etc.)

 

-How has her being raised in a traditional Seeker clan affected her world view and opinions, if at all? For example, does she have an aversion to things that remind her of said clan?

 

-Does she have any other notable hobbies outside of her "Likes"? I can see her playing pranks fairly easily.

I like these questions - Do you mind if I use them in her wiki as prompts? These really gave me a lot to think about, so thank you!

 

- And yes, Tamm loves to play pranks!

[Nero]

I don't mind at all. Feel free to use them as you wish.

 

A couple more:

 

-How does she prefer to resolve conflicts? Guile, diplomacy, violence, a mix, etc.

 

-What is her attitude towards certain contentious topics such as racism, poverty, etc. and what are her reasons, if any?

 

-What kind of "progress" does she work towards? Does she seek love? Riches? Does she have long term goals, or is she mostly focused on just having as much fun as she can in a day?