Feedback wanted on some prose

[rookie]

Hiya! I wrote some writing recently about my char who is a war vet (from the recent stormblood wars) and would love some feedback on my writing. It's prose; its about my characters inability to accept those who go to war with enthusiasm and leave with barely any scars. It is also about his jealousy towards those that avoid the scarring that comes with combat. It's about how people like the warrior of light swept in and took all the glory for themselves, when hundreds of thousands died at their feet.

 

https://lucksblackcat.tumblr.com/post/178165683943/glory-hunters-or-a-piece-to-those-monsters

 

Thanks for looking; I don't see too much free-writing going on anymore, so maybe I'll find some luck here? (I doubt anyone on tumblr read it... its tumblr).